So do y'all want an excerpt?

Do y'all want an excerpt? An excerpt on my newest story, Determined (or possibly a different title, I'm still pondering over it) which is written as if Ella is writing in her diary. I'll take all critiques and comments (and compliments LOL) but seriously I won't be offended if you give me a few pointers!



September 10th

     My English teacher told me to start off my first diary journal entry by introducing myself as if I;m talking to a real person. But since Mrs.Crotitz is the one who is making me write in this journal in the first place I'm not going to. So ha!
     When I told my mom about this she was thrilled.
"I knew I was making the right choice when I signed you up for that after school book club, Ella!"she had exclaimed.
   I can't do this on top of everything else I do! Dancing, ice skating, school and now this stupid book club. Thanks Mom,thanks a lot. This is so not how I wanted to start the school year.